Vision

She hopes for success

Craves for fame

Works to achieve

A recognition of name.

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She battles hurdles

And soars ahead

‘She is a fighter’

The people said.

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She wants to reach up

To their expectations

She wants to scale

Beyond wishes and figmentations.

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When evening sun bends low

And the Nyx descends

She tests her limits

To find her duendes.

She is still unsure,

As she struggles to find.

The passion driving her,

The dreams waking her mind.

It is a conflict of thoughts

Between expectations and desires

But she knows which will win:

The vision she aspires.

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Hey guys!

Here is another poem which I wanted to share. The eye is painted by me and the pictures are also clicked by me. So any feedback on how to improve their quality will surely help. The eye lashes could have been a lot better, I know. (And please don’t mind the not so beautiful handwriting. ) But well, clumsy me. Also, I gladly welcome any criticism regarding the poem. Thank you for reading!

I was inspired to write this post by a quote that I read. I’d like to share it:

I am not who I think I am. I am not who you think I am. I am who I think you think I am.

-Thomas Cooley

I think it is a beautiful quote signifying how important expectations have become in this society. We have become merely a perception that we have regarding the perception what others have about us. It blowed my mind, really. Do share your thoughts regarding it! Happy reading!

-R.S.

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17 Comments Add yours

  1. Tom Burton says:

    Beautifully done! πŸ˜€ Love the reflection shimmer in the iris & it’s a fab painting! ❀

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    1. Thank you so much, Tom! I was afraid that the golden shimmer thing had spoiled itπŸ˜… Thanks for making me feel better about it.πŸ˜ƒ

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  2. Novus Lectio says:

    I like it and practice makes perfect

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    1. I’m glad you like it Novus! Yes, practice is key!

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  3. The Pensieve says:

    Well… The quote is really great. Yeah, it’s true. That’s what society has come to nowadays….

    The images are pretty good. And the painting too. Your poetry…. The start was amazing but I got a feeling that you hurried with it. And hence it lost it’s charm and professionalism somewhere…. Nevertheless, it’s still a really cool ‘all-rounder’ job by a 13 year old. Your parents must be proud! πŸ˜ŠπŸ™Œ

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    1. Thank you! I’m glad you like the painting and the images. Can you elaborate on where I hurried with the poem? Cuz when I read it again, I got the sense that you’re right. That I did hurry and it lacks professionalism and charm. But I’m not sure where it went wrong. Can you tell me?
      Gee, when you put it that way…Cool’ ‘all-rounder’ job! Haha! Thanks a lot. Your words of appreciation mean so much to me and so does your criticism.

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  4. The Pensieve says:

    Errmm…. The stanzas no. 1,2 & the last one (no.6) are great! Loved them! But no. 3 & 5 seem a bit off. Like there you lose the rhyme scheme and the charm of the poem. The last line of both of these stanzas…. It’s off. A bit disruptive. Maybe you could change the wording and remove a word from them they’d fit in better.

    And stanza 04 is a little…. Overdone? πŸ˜… I mean, the choice of your words there is a bit too professional once you compare it with the rest….. Better keep all the stanzas at the same level as far as language is concerned….

    Hope that helps!

    Well of course, you do deserve the praise! And I am really amazed by the way you take my criticism. So positively. Cuz people usually start hating me once I start doing that too often. πŸ˜…

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    1. Yes, stanza 3 seems as if I’m forcing the words to fit in and rhyme…But why does stanza 5 seem off?
      I agree that stanza 4 does seem a bit overdone cuz the language of the rest of the poem seems pretty simple and this particular stanza just scales up(maybe, I was in a good mood, writing that one).
      Yes, it definitely helps!
      Nope, you criticize in a way that motivates me to improve.
      Thank you for helping me with this poem! Really appreciate it.

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  5. The Pensieve says:

    You could avoid using the word ‘that’… Plus a little more. Tell me if this sounds better:-

    She is still unsure,
    as she struggles to find.
    The passion driving her,
    the dreams waking her mind.

    Haha, maybe you were in a good mood! Just should have kept it up! πŸ˜‰

    Well, I am glad that I could be of help! 😊

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    1. That sounds way better! Now it actually has that rhythm. I mean the words rhyme better and fit in well.
      Thank you again for all the help!

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      1. The Pensieve says:

        You are welcome! 😊

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  6. Ashley says:

    Photography is on point ! Well done πŸ‘Œ

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  7. Love it! The poetry, the pictures, all of it!

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks a lot. For taking the time to read and comment. I’m glad you liked it so much.

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  8. floatinggold says:

    I think the poem, the eye picture and the photos are absolutely amazing. Well done.
    The quote you shared is very saddening, but often true.

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thank you so much, Goldie! Glad you liked it.
      Yes, it is quite sad considering that is what society is like now. I’d heard it in one of Jay Shetty’s interviews…

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