Poem #7: Aren’t you afraid of the dark?

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Hey there, li’l kid!

What are you doing up so late?

Hasn’t Mommy warned you

Of the monsters that prey on the weak?

The Darkness has begun its conquest

The Darkness, full of terrors

With creatures lurking in the shadows

And owls hooting in their nests.

When light is consumed

And Ole Grim Reaper returns

Rather be afraid than awake, li’l kid

Horrors lie in this endless night.

When all you see is pitch black

And Mommy shuts the door

That’s when the shadows growl

That’s when the hunt commences.

Nightmares ride into your sleep

And stallions stampede in chaos

On the head steed sits the Tyrant

The Ruthless Night, in its cruelest form.

When mayhem and fear take over your reins,

When Light is consumed and Dark conquers,

Won’t you listen to me and tuck yourself in?

Won’t you listen to your oldest friend?

-The Monster Under Your Bed

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Does it really bother us or are we programmed to respond to it? 

Will the child fear darkness if he is not told to?

Image Credits: Google Images

27 Comments Add yours

  1. Tom Burton says:

    Spooky & vividly expressed. Fantastic job, Rachel! πŸ˜€

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    1. Rachel Steve says:

      Thank you so much, Tom!

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  2. This one was beautiful!!!! I loved how you took sucha simple concept and weaved it into this piece, giving a glimpse of monsters underneath the bed lulling the child to sleep. And how the poem flows is amazing, lyrical, subtle yet underscoring this horrorific and dark imagery. Loved it!! Keep writing. Would love to read more πŸ’™

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    1. Rachel Steve says:

      Thank you soooooo much!
      Loved the way you described my poem. I’m glad you liked it so much. Thank you for taking the time to read my poem. And for sharing your views.

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      1. πŸ’™πŸ’™πŸ’™ anytime.. I am a sucker for dark fiction and always find it a delight to read new stuff..

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      2. Rachel Steve says:

        Well, thanks again!πŸ˜ƒ

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  3. MANISHA SINGH says:

    Great work! The last 2 questions were an eye-opener! Loved it.

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    1. Rachel Steve says:

      Thank you so much!

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      1. MANISHA SINGH says:

        My pleasure.

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  4. Very nice! Dark and mysterious. I especially liked the ending.

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks for reading! And commenting.


  5. floatinggold says:

    I liked the ending. Unexpected.

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Thanks for reading!

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  6. The Pensieve says:

    Fantastic idea… Although… I am really sorry to say this but I didn’t like the execution. Many of your recent poems were better than thisπŸ˜…

    And to answer your question:- Yes. A child will fear the dark nevertheless. It’s biology. We are programmed like that. No body tells a fawn to fear the tiger. But even it will have chills down it’s spine when it faces one.

    Notice how a 2 month old really doesn’t care who he is with, he smiles anyways. But that very same guy, at 8 months age will learn to fear a stranger. Nobody tells him. It’s instinct. A protective mechanism that evolves as our brain matures.

    That’s how life has survived. Because it feared it’s enemies πŸ˜…

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      Oh, I’m sorry. I’ll try and improve next time. I agree, the first few stanzas weren’t upto the mark…Thanks for pointing that out!
      Ooh, that’s interesting. But I don’t understand…if that instinct develops then why are some kids so naive while some aren’t?
      Yeah, survival of the fittest.
      Thanks for reading and for the criticism. Sometimes, I need that.πŸ™‚

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      1. The Pensieve says:

        I’m sure you’ll do a fine job next time! 😊 And it’s really nice of you to take criticism this positively. Really appreciate it.

        Errmmm… The reason to why kids are so different is exactly the reason why there’s so much diversity in life.

        Who we are is not simply decided by our upbringing or culture/ ΰ€Έΰ€‚ΰ€Έΰ₯ΰ€•ΰ€Ύΰ€°, Rashi. It’s also decided by a mix of genetic and environmental factors. Just like our external features, we are born with a set of internal/psychological features too. Ever seen a child and thought… “Boy, he does not look like their child at all. He is so different!” And we see examples of this throughout history and fiction. Like Harry potter. Raised in cruelty yet born to practice love and empathy. Although, behaving badly just because of a poor upbringing/family background really isn’t an excuse.

        Because like you said, our life is a product of our choices and decisions. And once we cross a certain age, we’d better learn to accept responsibility for it.

        Guess I rambled a little too much, huh? πŸ˜…

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      2. Rashi Singh says:

        Yeah, that makes sense…Of course the upvringing and other environmental have a lot to do with how people turn out to be.
        Yes, when the time is right, one needs to accept responsibilities for their decisions.
        No, not at all. It’s fun to read your “ramblings”. They give me new insights!

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  7. Is fear a natural or instinctive feeling or is it a result of experience? I tend towards the latter which makes me think that monsters in the dark can be a result of our interactions with children. The only instinct we would have is ‘fight or flight’ and darkness is a stranger here. I like this because it looks at one of those areas many might avoid writing about. Good work πŸ™‚

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    1. Rashi Singh says:

      I’m inclined towards the latter, too. Experience makes us wary of situations and things. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. I found them quite insightful. And thank you for reading as well!

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